Hello fellow Indie-Licious Authors. Today kicks off our first ever blurb/query critique. I will NOT share with you who the writer is, but please bear in mind that HELPFUL critique and criticism is ALL we are looking for here.
Do not post mean comments.
So, without further ado, please help us edit this baby into shape. (If you'd like your blurb/query featured here, please email indieliciousqueries@gmail.com).
~Krystal
Had she known she was descended from The Beast of fairytale lore, seventeen-year-old Holland Briggs wouldn’t have been shocked by the accusations of crimes she didn’t remember committing. But with no recollection of torching her ex-boyfriend’s house or poisoning his new girlfriend, and no knowledge of her cursed fate, these accusations devastate Holland’s world. Striving to pick up the shattered pieces of her life, Holland is no longer revered or admired. Not even the social lepers want to be seen with the school’s freak pyromaniac.
Armed with the knowledge of what the future holds for Holland Briggs, Mick Stevenson has one purpose in life: to save her from the curse that has haunted the Briggs family for generations. To do so, he must fall in love with Holland, earn her love in return, then break the centuries-old spell. Incorrectly trusting that time is on his side, Mick leisurely gets to know Holland, finding it incredibly easy to fall for the broken beauty.
But as Holland begins changing way before schedule, the dangerous side of her nature is revealed, and Mick struggles to find a way to free her.
He must succeed, because failure means losing Holland to the beast forever.
Okay, all, so our anonymous author has updated the blurb/query. What do you guys think?
From senior class president to dejected social outcast, with just the flick of a match.
After accusations of torching her ex-boyfriend’s home are followed by the mysterious poisoning of her ex-best friend, seventeen-year-old Holland Briggs assumes her life is over. And it is. But not in the way she thinks.
Holland’s problems are only just starting to unfold. As terrible things happen around her—like crimes she can’t remember committing—Holland begins her destined metamorphosis into The Beast that she’s only ever heard of in fairytales.
As Holland learns the truth about her cursed fate, and the spell that has plagued her family for centuries from Mick Stevenson—an ally who knows far more about her history than she does—Holland finds she must fall in love with the handsome stranger in order to break the spell.
But having sworn off love (and guys in general), this may be a difficult task. Even more so when time runs out, and Holland’s change begins way before schedule.
With the clock ticking, and Holland morphing into a dangerous mythical creature, will Mick be able to save her? Or will Holland become lost to the beast inside her forever?
Do not post mean comments.
So, without further ado, please help us edit this baby into shape. (If you'd like your blurb/query featured here, please email indieliciousqueries@gmail.com).
~Krystal
Had she known she was descended from The Beast of fairytale lore, seventeen-year-old Holland Briggs wouldn’t have been shocked by the accusations of crimes she didn’t remember committing. But with no recollection of torching her ex-boyfriend’s house or poisoning his new girlfriend, and no knowledge of her cursed fate, these accusations devastate Holland’s world. Striving to pick up the shattered pieces of her life, Holland is no longer revered or admired. Not even the social lepers want to be seen with the school’s freak pyromaniac.
Armed with the knowledge of what the future holds for Holland Briggs, Mick Stevenson has one purpose in life: to save her from the curse that has haunted the Briggs family for generations. To do so, he must fall in love with Holland, earn her love in return, then break the centuries-old spell. Incorrectly trusting that time is on his side, Mick leisurely gets to know Holland, finding it incredibly easy to fall for the broken beauty.
But as Holland begins changing way before schedule, the dangerous side of her nature is revealed, and Mick struggles to find a way to free her.
He must succeed, because failure means losing Holland to the beast forever.
Okay, all, so our anonymous author has updated the blurb/query. What do you guys think?
From senior class president to dejected social outcast, with just the flick of a match.
After accusations of torching her ex-boyfriend’s home are followed by the mysterious poisoning of her ex-best friend, seventeen-year-old Holland Briggs assumes her life is over. And it is. But not in the way she thinks.
Holland’s problems are only just starting to unfold. As terrible things happen around her—like crimes she can’t remember committing—Holland begins her destined metamorphosis into The Beast that she’s only ever heard of in fairytales.
As Holland learns the truth about her cursed fate, and the spell that has plagued her family for centuries from Mick Stevenson—an ally who knows far more about her history than she does—Holland finds she must fall in love with the handsome stranger in order to break the spell.
But having sworn off love (and guys in general), this may be a difficult task. Even more so when time runs out, and Holland’s change begins way before schedule.
With the clock ticking, and Holland morphing into a dangerous mythical creature, will Mick be able to save her? Or will Holland become lost to the beast inside her forever?
